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Story is a 30-day project - Part One.

Ok, so here's the deal. Let's write a story together. I can't say what kind of a story, because I can't say where it will take us. Rules (which is a very strong word itself) are simple. I will provide first few sentences today. Provide your vision of what should come next in your comments. Please, try to limit yourself to, let's say, five to ten sentences. And then I'll see - I might take one whole reply/comment as the next paragraph, maybe I'll try to combine some. Hard to say, because I don't know if the whole thing will come to life at all.

And then, another day, another paragraph. I will end each 30DayStory post with what we'll come up till then, maybe add a few more sentences and in a month from now, we'll have a true LJ joint venture story. I know there are a lot of you out there who write. So, let's do it, okay?

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The Day As It Was

I still don't know what the fuck was wrong with that lady on the bus. She was looking, no, not looking, bloody staring at me as if I were some kind of an alien. I tried to catch my reflection in the window to check if I left home snotty or unzipped or something, but as hard as I tried, nothing out of unusual met my eyes. Wherever I moved, there they were; annoying, empty, shallow eyes; stern gaze that already started flirting with downright rudeness. I just couldn't wait for my station to arrive.


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madknits
Sep. 27th, 2009 11:25 pm (UTC)
I thought I was going to make it home-free. I could see through the window that the bus was approaching my stop, and I was getting ready to shuffle to the exit, when, in a deep and growly voice that sounded like it came from the depths of Hell itself, she addressed me.
tilia_tomentosa
Sep. 27th, 2009 11:58 pm (UTC)
Wow, you even managed to match his style! :)
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:23 pm (UTC)
he is good! :)
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paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:11 pm (UTC)
oh, I used that. :)
tilia_tomentosa
Sep. 28th, 2009 02:51 am (UTC)
"When I was younger, no man would wear an earring. Shame on you, young man!"

"Yes, men were real men when we were younger," said a shrill voice from her other side. "Where is this world going?" Another witch from hell had been sitting quietly next to her all that time, looking all innocent, but now she obviously felt the need or obligation to back up her friend.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:12 pm (UTC)
Oh... many guys in old days wore earrings here, so it's not quite authentic. LOL

I will have to save that for later.
tilia_tomentosa
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:56 pm (UTC)
Oh, cultural differences again? :)

There were very strict rules about what was "proper" here in the communist era - even at the last phase (my childhood and adolescence) when people at least didn't get arrested for being "improperly" dressed. A man with an earring or two would be a big no-no. Few grown men would want to wear earrings anyway, because "real men don't do such things". And a male teenager trying to wear an earring at school would be in big trouble... the school authorities controlled even the length of the boys' hair back then, and the girls were not allowed to wear makeup or even nail polish at school.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:58 pm (UTC)
let me say this..... I am *really* happy I grew up in Slovenia. :)
tilia_tomentosa
Sep. 28th, 2009 04:21 pm (UTC)
At my comparatively "liberal" highschool, girls were only allowed to wear black or dark blue skirts... and you couldn't just buy such ready-made skirts at the shops, but at least fabric was available. I had only one school skirt, and I burnt it with the iron once. So I had to BEG for permission to attend school in a light grey skirt until the weekend when my mother would have the time to sew me a new dark skirt. Otherwise I would be chased out of school until I got a new "proper" skirt AND punished for being absent. That was in 1987 or 1988.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 04:29 pm (UTC)
There was never anything remotely close to dress code in our schools. In my secondary school - 1985 - there were guys with earrings, punk-styled girls (purple, green hair), you name it. We were there to learn, not to look decent. :)
tilia_tomentosa
Sep. 28th, 2009 04:50 pm (UTC)
There were very strict uniforms at most other schools - either the universal national uniform or the school's own version (still very "decent"). My school, being "liberal", accepted the national uniform and/or its own very "decent" dress code: Only black or dark blue for skirts or trousers; white and light blue were additionally acceptable for shirts, blouses, sweaters, etc. Buttoned up to the neck and skirts below the knees for the girls. If a girl wore trousers in winter, she had to have her behind additionally covered by the national-uniform frock or a long sweater.

But we girls were allowed to wear coloured shoes and coloured ribbons in our hair (never to be worn loose unless it was too short to be ponytailed). A teacher coming from another school was shocked with that unheard-of liberty.

We were there to be oppressed and discouraged from thinking with our own brains. That was the Soviet model.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 04:52 pm (UTC)
Good lord......
sparkytwmonkey
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:25 am (UTC)
"A curse!", she snarled, "A curse for what you've done. You caused it, now you must pay."

With that, I got off the bus. Looking back at the bus as it was leaving, I didn't see her.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:12 pm (UTC)
I totally dig (and used) the curse part.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:11 pm (UTC)
Love that. :)
ezran74
Sep. 28th, 2009 01:49 am (UTC)
I could stop thinking about her, I even checked the news paper to see if there was any mention of escaped mental patients, anything. Something about her really shook me. That night I felt like a little kid again, needing to check under the bed for monsters.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:13 pm (UTC)
very good pre-ending. :)
ezran74
Sep. 28th, 2009 05:33 pm (UTC)
LOL I know I couldn't quite hel myself....
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 05:39 pm (UTC)
I hope you like how our first part turned out. :)
ezran74
Sep. 28th, 2009 06:14 pm (UTC)
It's fun :) I'm enjoying it... we used to do a similar excercise in my artis way class. We would each start a story and then pass it around the room adding to it... it actually turned into some really intersting stories lol
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 06:35 pm (UTC)
Yes, the idea comes from my childhood as well. Every kid wrote a sentence or sometimes even a word without knowing what the rest were. But, we're grownups now, right, and we have the internet, right, so we'll a bit further away from that, right? :)

ezran74
Sep. 28th, 2009 07:39 pm (UTC)
Things often come full circle right?
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 07:40 pm (UTC)
Like full moon. :)
ezran74
Sep. 28th, 2009 07:43 pm (UTC)
sexy ;) I cant wait to see how you edit all these tid bits together :)
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 07:45 pm (UTC)
It's posted already :)
wuffnuff
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:58 am (UTC)
Hope you don't mind me joining in, I just stumbled across this!

Morning came and I woke with a jolt, heart beating an insane rhythm in my chest. Yesterdays event still vibrant in my thoughts. Was it all a dream? I padded to the bathroom and turned the hot water to the sink to splash away the remaining sleep. Face dripping I wipe the condensed steam from the mirror only to see the crone looking back at me.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:13 pm (UTC)
of course I do not mind. you provided a perfect ending of today's "work": :)
tilia_tomentosa
Sep. 28th, 2009 06:30 pm (UTC)
WOW, you are so good! :)
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 06:34 pm (UTC)
Yes, he gave us a perfect ending. :)
ezran74
Sep. 28th, 2009 07:41 pm (UTC)
creepy! I love it... HUGS to the Wuffy One glad I get to see you today!
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 07:43 pm (UTC)
Check it :)
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paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:14 pm (UTC)
I will have to use that part when we come to action part. For now it's just spooky. Well saved. :)
osodecanela
Sep. 28th, 2009 06:38 am (UTC)
As though a barn owl, her stare remained unwavering, nearly unblinking. There was a coldness there, impassive and menacing. The closer we came to my stop, the more I felt like prey, exposed and vulnerable. Two blocks early, I bolted for the door.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:15 pm (UTC)
awright!!! :) I just skipped "two blocks" early. THANKS! :)
arktos62
Sep. 28th, 2009 12:49 pm (UTC)
Finally, I couldn't take any more. My nerves were jangling and I knew something bad was going to happen if I didn't say something. "Look," I said, my anger and anxiety mounting in equal measure, "If you don't stop staring at me, I'll have to report you. Now, just keep your eyes on the road and drive the damn bus."
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:16 pm (UTC)
GOSH! Why haven't you replied earlier? Everybody picked the ghostly theme... I need to find a way to use that. It made me do a huge LOL. :)
bygbrat
Sep. 28th, 2009 01:47 pm (UTC)
My spidey senses tingled stronger than ever. As I exited the bus, my right arm extended toward the wretched women and the usual spray of silky strong spider web encased them like bugs. The muffled screams filled the night air only to be muffled by the closing bus doors and explosion of exhaust as the driver pulled away from the stop.
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:23 pm (UTC)
I will use this the second I start fighting with the evil. :) Thanks!
bygbrat
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:30 pm (UTC)
LOL, i was only kidding around. please do not ruin your story with my silliness. :P
paterson_si
Sep. 28th, 2009 03:36 pm (UTC)
Oh I will use it. I liked it. :)
thisisdavid
Oct. 5th, 2009 01:45 pm (UTC)
Then we hit a bump and I really had something to be self conscious about.
When we hit the bum, my nose bumped into the seat in front of me and started gushing blood!
paterson_si
Oct. 5th, 2009 01:52 pm (UTC)
ahh.. you need to go to the fifth part. :) we are past the bus already.
thisisdavid
Oct. 5th, 2009 02:02 pm (UTC)
Oh, lol.

I hear you about LJ though. It's dead. And it's sad. I refuse to give up though. I've had this journal forever so friends or no friends, I'll always post here. :)
paterson_si
Oct. 5th, 2009 02:10 pm (UTC)
I'll stay here as well. Silly FB took its toll.
thisisdavid
Oct. 5th, 2009 02:12 pm (UTC)
I know. But like Myspace, I think FB will die as well. I use FB but I think it's kinda lame. You can't blog on there just give silly little updates about crap no one cares about.
paterson_si
Oct. 5th, 2009 02:14 pm (UTC)
I have a FB account as well, but I don't use it. It really wears me out when I read lines like "thinks is will be a lovely day" or "is on a bus". WTF?
thisisdavid
Oct. 5th, 2009 03:13 pm (UTC)
I know. It's just meaningless!
paterson_si
Oct. 5th, 2009 03:43 pm (UTC)
And downright stupid.....
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